http://laurymdragon.livejournal.com/ ([identity profile] laurymdragon.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] poire_gourmande 2013-03-12 01:58 am (UTC)

"and heard the squawk of seagulls overheard" becomes repetitive. Something like "a entendu les cris des goélands entendus". Overhead would be "above". You might have to rephrase that sentence :3
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